1. EXT: SCHOOL GATES MORNING.
Jay and Jack are standing outside school.  Jay is a tall guy wearing a red t shirt with blue jeans, he has blue eyes

Jay

oi you what you doing here?

Jack

 I'm new to this school.

Jay

 Hahaha welcome to the school of BULLY'S!

2.   PLAYGROUND MORNING.
      Jack is eating his lunch, jay approaches him

                                                                               Jay

Now give me your money

Jack
 Are you so poor that you cant get your own money?

Jay
 don't push it, you don't know me, you don't know what i can do so give me your money?

Jack
 Ive heard all about boys like you, daddy not earning enough money that you have to bully others
        for it. *laughs*

3. STREETS NIGHT.
 Jacks walking home whilst Jay is with his friends behind Jack

Jack
*Humming*

Jay and friends
Oi you come here!

Jack

 Why are you following me home

Jay

 Because i always get what i want and you didn't give me your money

Jack

I told you i'm not giving you my money!

Jay

 Well then, seems like you face will have to pay for it don't you?

Jack: *Runs*

Jay and friends

Jack were coming to get you, you're on foot and were on our bikes!

Jack

 Pleaseeee i'm sorry but i need my money!

Jay and friends

 *Beat up Jack and take his money*

INT CLASSROOM MORNING

4.                                                                           Jack

 I wish i knew how to stand up for myself *talks to himself*

Jay

 ahh look who's there! Jack the new boy.

Jack

Leave from here right now, I'm not going to let you bully me!

                                                                               Jay

                    Little Jack getting brave? you wont show me attitude when i break your teeth!!!

Jack

*pushes Jay* Leave me alone! *locks the door*

5.  CLASSROOM MORNING
 Jack is in a classroom, Mrs Shed is outside the classroom talking to Jack
                     

Jack curls up in a corner and self harms himself with a blade he finds next to him.

*Knock Knock*

Mrs Shed

Jack can you please open the door?

*No reply from Jack*

Mrs Shed

Jack open the door this instantly!.. ok ok Jack tell me whats wrong?

Jack

*sigh, opens door* well ive been getting bullied miss Shed.

Mrs Shed

What? Jack are you alright? how long has this been happening for? who are the people?

Jack

Its Jay and his snobby friends.

6. CORRIDOOR MORNING
 Mrs Shed is having a word with Jay and Jack

    Mrs Shed

Oh look who it is? Jay again, im not suprised, i was just coming to fetch you.

Jay

What miss? what have i done now? let me go!!

Mrs Shed

Dont you dare speak to me like that you cocky little kid, i have been hearing you've bullying Jack? am i right?

 Jay

No miss i havent done anything i dont even know who jack is.

 Jack

Yes you do you liar! you beat me up and took my money!

Jay

Your going to regret this Jack, i mean it! your not getting away with this

Mrs Shed

and your going to be expelled!

Jay

No but..

Mrs Shed

No BUTS this time Jay! your friends are going to be in trouble too!

Jack

shame on you Jay ha!

Jay

You watch what i do! you think this stupid teacher can save your life? NO SHE CAN'T

Mrs Shed

That's enough both of you! go to my office now Jay! and Jack go back to lesson ill speak to you very shortly.

 

7. STREETS NIGHT
 Jay is terrorising Jack

Jay
Jack if you don't kill yourself I'm going to kill your family

Jack
What? please please don't do anything to my family

Jay
*throws brick at Jacks window*! want it to get worse for your family? didn't think so! so kill yourself

Jack
i will, i promise you i would be dead by tomorrow just don't do anything to my family

Jay
you better! if you don then watch what happens

JACKS HOUSE NIGHT
Jack is ready to commit sucide 

Jack
*writes a note to his family and hangs himself*

           

New boy

The bully's see Jack and whisper to him slowly to give the money. Jack doesn't give the money and swears at them. The 4 gang members start to shout at Jack and they push him into the classroom and lock him in. Jack calls for help but nobody helps him and he curls in to the classroom corner and starts to cry.




1) EXT : FRONT OF SCHOOL. DAY
    Jack a 10 year old  school boy stands outside the school looking up. Gets shoulder barged by a tall
    boy named Jay while jacks standing outside the school.
  



2) EXT: STANDING ON PLAYGROUND CORNER. DAY
    Jack stands near the playground corner when 1 boy approaches him and whispers in Jacks ear
    to give him money. Jack Swears at him because he was always told if you don't stand up for yourself
    you will always be bullied. suddenley 3 more boys approach Jack and start to hit him.


3) EXT: STREETS. NIGHT
    Jack walks to his house at 10pm not knowing the Bully's are following him on bikes and they
    quickly grab him and throw him on the floor and start to beat him up and leave him on the ground
    covered with blood and shouting this isn't the end of it you Jack.
   
4) INT: SCHOOL CLASSROOM. DAY

     Jack walks into an empty classroom remembering this classroom is not meant to be used for a day.
     Jack doen this because he wanted to spend time alone.


 5) INT: CORRIDOR. DAY
      one of the bully's see Jack and bring their gang along and shout 'oi theres the
      the faggit who cant stand his ground. They quickly run towards him and one of the main
     gang leaders grabs jack from his shirt and whispers in his ear 'gimme yoiur money right now you
     mug'. Jack refuses to give the money and tells them to fuck off. The 4 gang member shout at him
     telling him your getting brave now ent ya? They push him to the ground and lock him in.


6) INT: SCHOOL CLASSROOM. DAY
     Jack curls up in a corner and starts to cry. He then gets up and walks towards the classroom door
     and bangs and shouts help me! after being stuck in the room for 25minutes he wipes his tears and
     finds a balade next to him and starts to self harm himself on his arms

7) INT: SCHOOL CLASSROOM.DAY
     Teacher walks in and asks Jack whats wrong. jack explains. Bullying carrys on. jack commits
     sucide.

my target is to complete my script and make it shorter.

1) EXT : FRONT OF SCHOOL. DAY
    Jack a 7 year old school boy stands outside the school looking up. Gets shoulder barged by a tall boy
    while Jacks standing outside the house


2) EXT: STANDING ON PLAYGROUND CORNER. DAY
    Jack stands near the playground corner when 4 boys approach him at start to throw stones at him
    and steal his dinner money

3) EXT: STREETS. NIGHT
    Jack walks to his house at 10pm not knowing the Bully's are following him on bikes and they
    quickly grab him and throw him on the floor and start to beat him up and leave him on the ground
    covered with blood and shouting this isnt the end of it you faggit.
   
4) INT: SCHOOL CLASSROOM. DAY

     Jack walks into an empty classroom remembering this classroom is not meant to be used for a day.
     one of the bullys see Jack and bring their gang along and shout 'oi theres the
     the pussy, the faggit who cant stand his ground. They quickly run towards him and one of the main
     gang leaders grabs jack from his shirt and whispers in his ear 'gimmie your money right now you
     mug'. Jack refuses to give the money and tells them to fuck off. The 4 gang member shout at him
     telling him your getting brave now ent ya? They push him to the ground and lock him in.

5) INT: SCHOOL CLASSROOM. DAY
     Jack curls up in a corner and starts to cry. He then gets up and walks towards the classroom door
     and bangs and shouts help me! after being stuck in the room for 25minutes he wipes his tears and
     starts to self harm. gets a blade and starts to cut himself on his arms.

6)INT: 



harms himself, techer comeas tkes him out and boy tells wt happend , bullys get caught . bullys deny bu

A lot of dialogue can make the play boring which will make people stop watching the play and lose interest in it. so we will put more stage direction than dialogue. In the play Young Dracula it is shown too use less text in the opening scenes of the script because if you just make the first scenes really boring people wouldn't want to watch on. on the other hand if you use less dialogue and more stage direction then people will feel interested in the play and would want to watch the rest of the play.

CHARACTER PROFILE QUESTIONS

• What is your character's full name? What is their preferred nickname?
    Jack Bell

• How old is your character throughout the majority of the story?
  10
• What is their date of birth?
  15th April 2002.
• What is their place of birth?
  Greece
• Are they male or female?
  Male
• Where do they live now? Are they married, single, engaged, divorced, widowed?
  America, single.
• Does your character have any brothers or sisters? If so, how many?
  None.
• What is your character's overall health like?
  Good.
• What type of personality does your character have?
  Quiet and doesn't tell people about his problems.
• What is their Ethnic background and religion?
  Jew, white.
• What is their current occupation?
  My character is currently a student.
• What level of education does your character have?
  My character is still in Primary school.
• What does your character like or love?
  My character likes to play football and drawing (ART)
• What does your character dislike or hate?
  My character dislikes school and bullies.

Structure of my new documentary

Starting: The starting of my documentary will show peoples blackberry's in their hands and them using it.

Middle: Footage of the riots, some of the information that was sent through blackberry messengers and how it effected the riots. we will interview people about when the blackberry messenger shut down for 2 or 3 days and how people reacted towards it and how they felt.

End: The end of my documentary will be about what people now think of blackberry's after it had affected the riots and when it shut down for a couple of days. we will also film people.


 How will we do this :
For the start of the documentary we will film  couple of people asking them about if they think blackberry's are addictive and well shoot them saying whether yes or no, we might shoot this at break time or lunch time. for the middle part of our documentary we will use the computer to get footage of the riots and edit it into the documentary and for the end of the documentary we will interview a few people e.g. teachers, students and parents, we will ask them for their opinion on blackberry's, how they think it affected the riots, should it be allowed, and is it addictive.