Tuesday, 6 December 2011

1. EXT: SCHOOL GATES MORNING.
Jay and Jack are standing outside school.  Jay is a tall guy wearing a red t shirt with blue jeans, he has blue eyes


Jay
oi you what you doing here?

Jack
 I'm new to this school.

Jay
 Hahaha welcome to the school of BULLY'S!


2.   PLAYGROUND MORNING.
      Jack is eating his lunch, jay approaches him

                                                                               Jay
Now give me your money

Jack
 Are you so poor that you cant get your own money?

Jay
 don't push it, you don't know me, you don't know what i can do so give me your money?

Jack
 Ive heard all about boys like you, daddy not earning enough money that you have to bully others
        for it. *laughs*


3. STREETS NIGHT.
 Jacks walking home whilst Jay is with his friends behind Jack

Jack
*Humming*

Jay and friends
Oi you come here!

Jack
 Why are you following me home
Jay
 Because i always get what i want and you didn't give me your money

Jack
I told you i'm not giving you my money!
Jay
 Well then, seems like you face will have to pay for it don't you?

Jack: *Runs*
Jay and friends
Jack were coming to get you, you're on foot and were on our bikes!
Jack
 Pleaseeee i'm sorry but i need my money!
Jay and friends
 *Beat up Jack and take his money*
INT CLASSROOM MORNING

4.                                                                           Jack
 I wish i knew how to stand up for myself *talks to himself*
Jay
 ahh look who's there! Jack the new boy.
Jack
Leave from here right now, I'm not going to let you bully me!
                                                                               Jay
                    Little Jack getting brave? you wont show me attitude when i break your teeth!!!

Jack
*pushes Jay* Leave me alone! *locks the door*

5.  CLASSROOM MORNING
 Jack is in a classroom, Mrs Shed is outside the classroom talking to Jack
                     
Jack curls up in a corner and self harms himself with a blade he finds next to him.
*Knock Knock*

Mrs Shed
Jack can you please open the door?

*No reply from Jack*

Mrs Shed
Jack open the door this instantly!.. ok ok Jack tell me whats wrong?

Jack
*sigh, opens door* well ive been getting bullied miss Shed.

Mrs Shed
What? Jack are you alright? how long has this been happening for? who are the people?
Jack
Its Jay and his snobby friends.

6. CORRIDOOR MORNING
 Mrs Shed is having a word with Jay and Jack
    Mrs Shed
Oh look who it is? Jay again, im not suprised, i was just coming to fetch you.

Jay
What miss? what have i done now? let me go!!

Mrs Shed
Dont you dare speak to me like that you cocky little kid, i have been hearing you've bullying Jack? am i right?

 Jay
No miss i havent done anything i dont even know who jack is.

 Jack
Yes you do you liar! you beat me up and took my money!

Jay
Your going to regret this Jack, i mean it! your not getting away with this

Mrs Shed
and your going to be expelled!

Jay
No but..

Mrs Shed
No BUTS this time Jay! your friends are going to be in trouble too!
Jack
shame on you Jay ha!

Jay
You watch what i do! you think this stupid teacher can save your life? NO SHE CAN'T

Mrs Shed
That's enough both of you! go to my office now Jay! and Jack go back to lesson ill speak to you very shortly.


 
7. STREETS NIGHT
 Jay is terrorising Jack
Jay
Jack if you don't kill yourself I'm going to kill your family

Jack
What? please please don't do anything to my family

Jay
*throws brick at Jacks window*! want it to get worse for your family? didn't think so! so kill yourself

Jack
i will, i promise you i would be dead by tomorrow just don't do anything to my family

Jay
you better! if you don then watch what happens



JACKS HOUSE NIGHT
Jack is ready to commit sucide 

Jack
*writes a note to his family and hangs himself*


           

1 comment:

  1. Sanya, you need to write your last scene in more detail, and check your work for punctuation. Otherwise well done, this script has a clear plot and evidence of character development, well done.

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